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Practice Writing: Write Essay ID: #693 Problems of Industrial Revolution R1
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Do you believe that the industrial revolution was the main factor for problems in a developed nation?

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Do you believe that the industrial revolution was the main factor for problems in a developed nation?
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Many contemporary challenges in developed nations have deep historical roots. I largely agree that the industrial revolution was the principal driver of these problems, because it reshaped production systems, urban life, and social relations at an unprecedented speed. While later policies and global forces intensified some effects, the foundational pressures emerged during this transformative period and continue to influence national development.

First, rapid industrial development produced structural urban problems that persist today. Large-scale migration towards factory work created overcrowded cities, strained housing supply, and poor sanitation, patterns that later evolved into modern congestion and infrastructure deficits. For example, early factory towns normalised dense and polluted urban layouts, making subsequent environmental regulation and public health planning far more complex, expensive, and politically contentious.

Second, the industrial revolution embedded economic inequality and environmental harm within developed economies. Machine-based production concentrated wealth and decision-making power among owners, weakening labour security and widening income disparities that remain difficult to correct. Although technological progress generated long-term prosperity, it also established high levels of resource consumption and emissions, leaving governments to manage climate pressures and social costs not anticipated during early industrial growth.

In conclusion, although contemporary governance, technology, and globalisation contribute to national problems, the industrial revolution remains the main underlying factor. Its lasting impact on urban form, inequality, and environmental stress continues to shape developed nations. Addressing present challenges therefore requires recognising and correcting these historical industrial foundations.

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  • Fully addresses the prompt in depth, showing full command of the argument by reformulating the issue in the writer's own words and expanding important points with specificity.
  • The argument is supported convincingly with subsidiary points and relevant examples throughout the response.
How this answer meets itThe essay gives a clear opinion and supports it with a concrete example of early factory towns. the industrial revolution was the principal driver of these problemsearly factory towns normalised dense and polluted urban layouts
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  • Has an effective logical structure, flows smoothly, and can be followed with ease.
  • The argument is clear and cohesive and developed systematically at length; a well-developed introduction and conclusion are present, and ideas are organised cohesively into clear, logically sequenced paragraphs.
  • Uses a variety of connective devices effectively and consistently to convey relationships between ideas.
How this answer meets itOrdered linkers open the paragraphs so the argument is easy to follow. FirstFor exampleSecondAlthoughIn conclusion
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  • A variety of expressions and vocabulary are used appropriately to formulate ideas with ease and precision throughout the response.
  • No signs of limitations restricting what can be communicated.
  • Errors in language use, if present, are rare and minor, and meaning is completely clear.
How this answer meets itThe writer uses a concession clause and a relative clause with clarity. While later policies and global forces intensified some effectspatterns that later evolved into modern congestion
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  • Shows consistent grammatical control of complex language. Errors are rare and difficult to spot.
How this answer meets itThis complex sentence with a participle clause is accurate and clear. Machine-based production concentrated wealth and decision-making power among owners
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  • Good command of a broad lexical repertoire, idiomatic expressions and collocations.
How this answer meets itStrong academic collocations show a wide word range. structural urban problemseconomic inequalityresource consumptioninfrastructure deficits
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  • Correct spelling.
How this answer meets itSpelling is correct, including British spelling. normalisedglobalisation
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  • Length is within the required 200 to 300 words.
How this answer meets itThe essay has 234 words, which is inside the required range. It is a clear four-paragraph essay.
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