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Practice Writing: Write Essay ID: #48256 Friends' Opinions
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Some people think that the family has the most important influence on young adults. Other people think that friends have the most important influence on young adults. What is your opinion?

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Some people think that the family has the most important influence on young adults. Other people think that friends have the most important influence on young adults. What is your opinion?
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Influences on young adults are shaped by both family and peers, yet their relative impact differs. While friendships strongly affect daily behaviour and social identity, I believe the family exerts the most important and lasting influence on young adults because it forms core values and provides stable guidance during key transitions.

Family influence is foundational because it begins early and shapes beliefs, habits, and expectations that persist into adulthood. Parents model attitudes towards education, work, and relationships, which young adults often reproduce when making independent choices. For example, students from households that prioritise discipline and learning tend to manage university demands more effectively, showing how early guidance translates into adult competence.

Friends undeniably matter, especially in adolescence and early adulthood, as peer groups influence tastes, language, and short-term decisions. However, peer influence is typically conditional and changeable as social circles shift across workplaces or cities. When young adults face serious decisions such as career direction or ethical dilemmas, they often seek family advice, suggesting that familial norms outweigh peer pressure at critical moments.

In conclusion, although friends shape social behaviour and provide emotional support, their influence is often temporary. The family's role in establishing values, resilience, and decision-making frameworks gives it a deeper and more enduring impact on young adults. Therefore, family influence should be regarded as more significant overall.

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PTE criteria · full marks
  • Fully addresses the prompt in depth, showing full command of the argument by reformulating the issue in the writer's own words and expanding important points with specificity.
  • The argument is supported convincingly with subsidiary points and relevant examples throughout the response.
How this answer meets itThe essay gives a clear opinion in the writer's own words and expands it with a real example. The students example adds depth. I believe the family exerts the most important and lasting influence on young adultsstudents from households that prioritise discipline and learning tend to manage university demands more effectively
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Has an effective logical structure, flows smoothly, and can be followed with ease.
  • The argument is clear and cohesive and developed systematically at length; a well-developed introduction and conclusion are present, and ideas are organised cohesively into clear, logically sequenced paragraphs.
  • Uses a variety of connective devices effectively and consistently to convey relationships between ideas.
How this answer meets itThe writer uses linkers to open ideas and to contrast them. This keeps the two views in clear order. For example,However,When young adults face serious decisionsIn conclusion,Therefore,
PTE criteria · full marks
  • A variety of expressions and vocabulary are used appropriately to formulate ideas with ease and precision throughout the response.
  • No signs of limitations restricting what can be communicated.
  • Errors in language use, if present, are rare and minor, and meaning is completely clear.
How this answer meets itThe essay uses complex clauses with ease. The relative clause and the concessive idea both stay clear. that persist into adulthoodalthough friends shape social behaviour and provide emotional support, their influence is often temporary
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  • Shows consistent grammatical control of complex language. Errors are rare and difficult to spot.
How this answer meets itOne accurate complex sentence links a main clause to a which-clause. The control is consistent. which young adults often reproduce when making independent choices
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  • Good command of a broad lexical repertoire, idiomatic expressions and collocations.
How this answer meets itThe essay uses precise academic words and natural collocations. They show a broad word range. social identitycore valuespeer pressuredecision-making frameworks
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  • Correct spelling.
How this answer meets itSpelling is correct throughout, including British forms. Two clear examples are shown. behaviourprioritise
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  • Length is within the required 200 to 300 words.
How this answer meets itThe essay has 220 words, which sits inside the 200 to 300 range. It is a clear four-paragraph essay.
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