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Practice Writing: Write Essay ID: #47238 Hyper Competition
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Some people claim that competition improves the quality of our private and professional lives. Others believe that being hyper-competitive is bad for individuals and society in general. What is your opinion?

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Some people claim that competition improves the quality of our private and professional lives. Others believe that being hyper-competitive is bad for individuals and society in general. What is your opinion?
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Competition is often portrayed as a driver of progress in both work and personal development. While moderate rivalry can motivate effort and innovation, I argue that unchecked hyper-competition ultimately damages wellbeing and social cohesion. A balanced approach that values collaboration alongside competition produces higher quality outcomes in private and professional life.

Supporters of competition are correct that it can raise standards by rewarding skill, persistence, and creativity. In workplaces, clear performance benchmarks encourage employees to refine expertise and use time efficiently. Similarly, academic or sporting contests can build discipline and resilience, which are transferable to long-term career success. These benefits, however, depend on competition remaining fair and proportionate.

Nevertheless, when competition becomes excessive, it often undermines mental health and ethical behaviour. Hyper-competitive environments promote constant comparison, stress, and fear of failure, leading to burnout and reduced collaboration. In professional settings, this can encourage short-term gains, unhealthy rivalry, and even misconduct, which harms organisations and society. Therefore, quality of life declines when winning becomes more important than collective progress.

In conclusion, competition is valuable only when it is balanced by collaboration and ethical limits. Moderate rivalry can enhance performance and personal growth, but hyper-competition weakens wellbeing and social trust. For individuals and societies to thrive, competition should be managed as a constructive tool rather than an all-consuming goal.

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  • Fully addresses the prompt in depth, showing full command of the argument by reformulating the issue in the writer's own words and expanding important points with specificity.
  • The argument is supported convincingly with subsidiary points and relevant examples throughout the response.
How this answer meets itThe writer argues that hyper-competition harms wellbeing and prefers balance. A clear example about workplace benchmarks supports this. unchecked hyper-competition ultimately damages wellbeing and social cohesionclear performance benchmarks encourage employees to refine expertise
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  • Has an effective logical structure, flows smoothly, and can be followed with ease.
  • The argument is clear and cohesive and developed systematically at length; a well-developed introduction and conclusion are present, and ideas are organised cohesively into clear, logically sequenced paragraphs.
  • Uses a variety of connective devices effectively and consistently to convey relationships between ideas.
How this answer meets itThe essay uses linking words to open paragraphs and connect ideas. The structure is easy to follow. SimilarlyhoweverNeverthelessThereforeIn conclusion
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  • A variety of expressions and vocabulary are used appropriately to formulate ideas with ease and precision throughout the response.
  • No signs of limitations restricting what can be communicated.
  • Errors in language use, if present, are rare and minor, and meaning is completely clear.
How this answer meets itThe essay uses complex sentences with precision. The concessive clause and the time clause are well built. While moderate rivalry can motivate effort and innovationwhen competition becomes excessive
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  • Shows consistent grammatical control of complex language. Errors are rare and difficult to spot.
How this answer meets itThe writer uses a correct participle clause to add result. The grammar is accurate. leading to burnout and reduced collaboration
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  • Good command of a broad lexical repertoire, idiomatic expressions and collocations.
How this answer meets itThe essay uses strong academic words and natural collocations. This shows a broad vocabulary. social cohesionconstant comparisoncollective progressconstructive tool
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  • Correct spelling.
How this answer meets itAll words are spelled correctly. Longer words are handled well. proportionatecollaboration
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  • Length is within the required 200 to 300 words.
How this answer meets itThe essay is 217 words, which fits the 200 to 300 range. It is a clear four-paragraph essay.
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