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Practice Writing: Write Essay ID: #35918 Individual choices
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Some people think children should be given the freedom to make their own individual choices, while others believe constant supervision from parents is required. Which position is closer to your own opinion? Support your point of view with reasons and/or examples from your own experience.

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Some people think children should be given the freedom to make their own individual choices, while others believe constant supervision from parents is required. Which position is closer to your own opinion? Support your point of view with reasons and/or examples from your own experience.
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The question of whether children should enjoy freedom in decision-making or remain under close parental supervision reflects differing views of development. In my opinion, guided freedom is preferable, meaning children should make individual choices within clear boundaries. This approach respects autonomy while still protecting welfare and long-term growth.

Allowing children to make choices helps them develop responsibility, confidence, and problem-solving skills. When young people decide how to manage homework, friendships, or hobbies, they learn to evaluate consequences rather than rely solely on instructions. From my own experience, being trusted to organise my study schedule encouraged discipline and self-motivation, which later proved essential at university. Excessive control, by contrast, can produce dependence and limit emotional maturity.

However, constant supervision is often defended because children may lack judgement and are vulnerable to risk. This concern is valid in areas involving safety, such as online behaviour or health. Nevertheless, supervision should be proportional rather than intrusive. Parents can monitor outcomes and offer advice without taking over any action. For example, discussing mistakes after they occur is often more educational than preventing all errors in advance.

Overall, I believe children benefit most from freedom supported by parental guidance. A balanced approach allows them to explore independence while learning from adults' experience. Such a model prepares children not only to follow rules, but to make sound decisions when supervision is no longer present.

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PTE criteria · full marks
  • Fully addresses the prompt in depth, showing full command of the argument by reformulating the issue in the writer's own words and expanding important points with specificity.
  • The argument is supported convincingly with subsidiary points and relevant examples throughout the response.
How this answer meets itThe writer gives a clear personal opinion and supports it with an example from their own life. The point about a study schedule shows the idea in action. In my opinion, guided freedom is preferablebeing trusted to organise my study schedule encouraged discipline
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Has an effective logical structure, flows smoothly, and can be followed with ease.
  • The argument is clear and cohesive and developed systematically at length; a well-developed introduction and conclusion are present, and ideas are organised cohesively into clear, logically sequenced paragraphs.
  • Uses a variety of connective devices effectively and consistently to convey relationships between ideas.
How this answer meets itThe paragraphs begin with clear linking words that show contrast and result. These connectors keep the argument easy to follow. However, constant supervisionNevertheless, supervision should be proportionalFor example, discussing mistakesOverall, I believe children
PTE criteria · full marks
  • A variety of expressions and vocabulary are used appropriately to formulate ideas with ease and precision throughout the response.
  • No signs of limitations restricting what can be communicated.
  • Errors in language use, if present, are rare and minor, and meaning is completely clear.
How this answer meets itThe essay uses complex sentences with time and contrast clauses in a smooth way. The meaning is always clear. When young people decide how to manage homework, friendships, or hobbies, they learn to evaluate consequenceswhich later proved essential at university
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  • Shows consistent grammatical control of complex language. Errors are rare and difficult to spot.
How this answer meets itThis sentence handles a relative clause and comparison accurately. The grammar is controlled and correct. This approach respects autonomy while still protecting welfare and long-term growth
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Good command of a broad lexical repertoire, idiomatic expressions and collocations.
How this answer meets itThe writer picks precise academic words and natural word pairings. These choices show a broad range of vocabulary. problem-solving skillsself-motivationemotional maturityproportional rather than intrusive
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  • Correct spelling.
How this answer meets itThe spelling is correct, including the British form. These words are written accurately. vulnerablejudgement
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Length is within the required 200 to 300 words.
How this answer meets itThe essay is 228 words, which sits inside the 200 to 300 range. It is a clear four-paragraph essay with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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