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Practice Writing: Write Essay ID: #35402 Equality
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In recent years, there has been growing interest in the relationship between equality and personal achievement. Some people believe that individuals can achieve more in egalitarian societies. Others believe that high levels of personal achievement are possible only if individuals are free to succeed or fail according to their individual merits. What is your view of the relationship between equality and personal success?

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In recent years, there has been growing interest in the relationship between equality and personal achievement. Some people believe that individuals can achieve more in egalitarian societies. Others believe that high levels of personal achievement are possible only if individuals are free to succeed or fail according to their individual merits. What is your view of the relationship between equality and personal success?
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The relationship between equality and personal success has become increasingly contested in modern societies that prize competition and merit. Although freedom to succeed or fail matters, I argue that individuals generally achieve more in broadly egalitarian societies. Equality of opportunity creates conditions in which talent can develop, rather than confining success to a privileged minority.

Egalitarian societies support personal achievement by guaranteeing fair access to education, healthcare, and basic economic security. When people are not limited by poverty, discrimination, or unreliable public services, they can invest sustained effort in developing skills and pursuing long-term goals. For instance, students from modest backgrounds are more likely to reach high levels of performance when schooling quality is not determined by family income. Consequently, achievement reflects ability and effort rather than inherited advantage, raising overall societal success.

Opponents claim that strong equality weakens motivation by reducing rewards for excellence. This argument, however, often confuses equality with identical outcomes. Egalitarian systems can recognise merit while preventing extreme inequality that deters risk-taking. When failure does not result in permanent exclusion, individuals are more willing to innovate, retrain, or establish new enterprises, which ultimately strengthens both personal success and economic dynamism.

In conclusion, personal achievement flourishes most when individual effort operates within an egalitarian framework. Equality of opportunity enhances, rather than restricts, the capacity for meaningful and sustained success.

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  • Fully addresses the prompt in depth, showing full command of the argument by reformulating the issue in the writer's own words and expanding important points with specificity.
  • The argument is supported convincingly with subsidiary points and relevant examples throughout the response.
How this answer meets itThe writer argues clearly that people achieve more in equal societies, and supports it with a concrete example about students from modest backgrounds. This fully answers the prompt. individuals generally achieve more in broadly egalitarian societiesstudents from modest backgrounds are more likely to reach high levels of performance
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  • Has an effective logical structure, flows smoothly, and can be followed with ease.
  • The argument is clear and cohesive and developed systematically at length; a well-developed introduction and conclusion are present, and ideas are organised cohesively into clear, logically sequenced paragraphs.
  • Uses a variety of connective devices effectively and consistently to convey relationships between ideas.
How this answer meets itLinking words open sentences and paragraphs to show example, result, and contrast. They keep the argument well ordered. For instanceConsequentlyOpponents claim thathoweverIn conclusion
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  • A variety of expressions and vocabulary are used appropriately to formulate ideas with ease and precision throughout the response.
  • No signs of limitations restricting what can be communicated.
  • Errors in language use, if present, are rare and minor, and meaning is completely clear.
How this answer meets itThe essay uses complex sentences with time and concessive clauses that flow well. The meaning stays completely clear. When people are not limited by poverty, discrimination, or unreliable public services, they canAlthough freedom to succeed or fail matters, I argue that
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  • Shows consistent grammatical control of complex language. Errors are rare and difficult to spot.
How this answer meets itThis sentence uses a clean conditional structure with correct grammar. The construction is accurate. When failure does not result in permanent exclusion, individuals are more willing to innovate
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  • Good command of a broad lexical repertoire, idiomatic expressions and collocations.
How this answer meets itThe essay picks precise academic words and natural word pairs. These show a broad vocabulary. Equality of opportunityinherited advantagedeters risk-takingeconomic dynamism
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  • Correct spelling.
How this answer meets itSpelling is correct across the essay, including the British form of this word. There are no spelling mistakes. egalitarianrecognise
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  • Length is within the required 200 to 300 words.
How this answer meets itThe essay is 222 words, which fits the 200 to 300 range. It is a clear four-paragraph essay.
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