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Practice Writing: Write Essay ID: #35123 Educational pressure
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Nowadays children are experiencing increased educational, social and commercial pressure. What are the reasons for this? What is a solution to reduce the pressure?

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Nowadays children are experiencing increased educational, social and commercial pressure. What are the reasons for this? What is a solution to reduce the pressure?
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Nowadays, children face intensifying educational, social and commercial pressure that shapes their daily lives and expectations. This trend arises from structural changes in schooling, digital social environments and aggressive market forces. While ambition can benefit students, excessive pressure risks harming children's wellbeing and mental health, so the reasons behind it and a workable solution both deserve attention.

The first reason is heightened academic competition driven by standardised examination and early performance ranking. Schools and parents often prioritise measurable outcomes, leading children into heavy homework loads, tutoring and fear of failure. Consequently, limited pathways to prestigious universities amplify the belief that success must be secured young, which narrows learning for students to exam preparation rather than curiosity and balance.

A second reason for this pressure comes from social and commercial influences, particularly through social media. Indeed, digital platforms encourage constant comparison and peer popularity metrics, intensifying anxiety and stress among children. In parallel, kids are targeted as consumers through advertising, influencer culture and consumerism, creating material expectations that normalise constant purchasing as a marker of status.

To reduce this pressure, a balanced solution is needed from every stakeholder. Schools should emphasise formative assessment, creativity and student wellbeing alongside achievement, while parents set boundaries around screen use and model realistic expectations for their children. Furthermore, stronger regulation of child-focused advertising, better counselling and time management support, plus hobbies, exercise and relaxation, would protect children from unnecessary commercial and academic pressure. In conclusion, the educational, social and commercial reasons are clear, and this aligned solution can genuinely ease the pressure that children now carry.

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PTE criteria · full marks
  • Fully addresses the prompt in depth, showing full command of the argument by reformulating the issue in the writer's own words and expanding important points with specificity.
  • The argument is supported convincingly with subsidiary points and relevant examples throughout the response.
How this answer meets itThe essay answers both parts by giving reasons for the pressure and a clear solution, with a real example about exams and rankings. The first reason is heightened academic competitionstandardised examination and early performance ranking
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Has an effective logical structure, flows smoothly, and can be followed with ease.
  • The argument is clear and cohesive and developed systematically at length; a well-developed introduction and conclusion are present, and ideas are organised cohesively into clear, logically sequenced paragraphs.
  • Uses a variety of connective devices effectively and consistently to convey relationships between ideas.
How this answer meets itClear ordering words and linkers open the paragraphs, so the reasons and the solution follow logically. The first reasonA second reasonIndeed,To reduce this pressure,Furthermore,In conclusion,
PTE criteria · full marks
  • A variety of expressions and vocabulary are used appropriately to formulate ideas with ease and precision throughout the response.
  • No signs of limitations restricting what can be communicated.
  • Errors in language use, if present, are rare and minor, and meaning is completely clear.
How this answer meets itThe writer uses long sentences with subordinate clauses that keep the meaning clear. which narrows learning for students to exam preparation rather than curiosity and balancewhile parents set boundaries around screen use and model realistic expectations
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  • Shows consistent grammatical control of complex language. Errors are rare and difficult to spot.
How this answer meets itThis complex sentence uses a present participle phrase correctly with no error. creating material expectations that normalise constant purchasing as a marker of status
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  • Good command of a broad lexical repertoire, idiomatic expressions and collocations.
How this answer meets itThe essay shows a broad academic word range with strong collocations. aggressive market forcesformative assessmentinfluencer culturetime management support
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  • Correct spelling.
How this answer meets itSpelling is correct throughout, including the British form of this word. prioritisecounselling
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  • Length is within the required 200 to 300 words.
How this answer meets itThe essay is 261 words, which is within the 200 to 300 range, and it is a clear four-paragraph essay.
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