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Practice Writing: Write Essay ID: #33673 celebrities
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Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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Media attention on famous figures has expanded across television, digital platforms, and advertising, shaping how young audiences understand success and identity. I largely agree that intensive celebrity coverage harms children, because it distorts core values and behaviour while displacing healthier role models during critical developmental stages.

First, celebrity-focused media frequently promotes unrealistic lifestyles and appearance standards that children struggle to interpret critically. Persistent exposure to extreme wealth, cosmetic perfection, and viral fame encourages materialism and body dissatisfaction, particularly among adolescents. For instance, influencer culture often equates popularity with personal worth, leading children to judge achievement by follower counts rather than effort or skill. This mindset weakens motivation, persistence, and respect for gradual improvement.

Admittedly, some media coverage highlights genuine talent, creativity, or charitable work, which can inspire ambition. However, these positive messages are overshadowed by sensational reporting that rewards controversy over competence. When scandals dominate headlines, children may learn that visibility, rather than contribution, leads to success. Such normalisation of impulsive or reckless behaviour risks reducing respect for discipline, education, and ethical conduct.

In conclusion, although limited constructive examples exist, the overall volume and tone of celebrity media exert a largely negative influence on children. By prioritising fame and consumption over effort and integrity, this coverage shapes unhealthy aspirations. A stronger emphasis on diverse, achievement-based role models would better support balanced childhood development.

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PTE criteria · full marks
  • Fully addresses the prompt in depth, showing full command of the argument by reformulating the issue in the writer's own words and expanding important points with specificity.
  • The argument is supported convincingly with subsidiary points and relevant examples throughout the response.
How this answer meets itThe writer agrees clearly and supports the view with a real example. The point is that celebrity media harms children, shown with influencer culture. intensive celebrity coverage harms childreninfluencer culture often equates popularity with personal worth
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Has an effective logical structure, flows smoothly, and can be followed with ease.
  • The argument is clear and cohesive and developed systematically at length; a well-developed introduction and conclusion are present, and ideas are organised cohesively into clear, logically sequenced paragraphs.
  • Uses a variety of connective devices effectively and consistently to convey relationships between ideas.
How this answer meets itClear linking words open the sentences and order the ideas well. They guide the reader through the argument. FirstFor instanceAdmittedlyHoweverIn conclusion
PTE criteria · full marks
  • A variety of expressions and vocabulary are used appropriately to formulate ideas with ease and precision throughout the response.
  • No signs of limitations restricting what can be communicated.
  • Errors in language use, if present, are rare and minor, and meaning is completely clear.
How this answer meets itThe writer uses long sentences with joined clauses that stay clear. These show good control of complex language. because it distorts core values and behaviour while displacing healthier role modelsWhen scandals dominate headlines, children may learn that visibility
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Shows consistent grammatical control of complex language. Errors are rare and difficult to spot.
How this answer meets itThis concessive sentence is built correctly and reads smoothly. The grammar stays under full control. although limited constructive examples exist, the overall volume and tone
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Good command of a broad lexical repertoire, idiomatic expressions and collocations.
How this answer meets itThe essay uses precise academic words and natural word pairs. These fit the media topic well. unrealistic lifestylesbody dissatisfactionsensational reportingethical conduct
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  • Correct spelling.
How this answer meets itThe spelling is correct throughout the essay. These two words are good examples. adolescentsachievement
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  • Length is within the required 200 to 300 words.
How this answer meets itThe essay has 223 words, which is inside the 200 to 300 range. It is a clear four paragraph essay.
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