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Practice Writing: Write Essay ID: #718 Pay Equity R1
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Many workers like nurses and teachers should get more pay, especially when people working in finance are getting more pay nowadays. What is your opinion?

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Many workers like nurses and teachers should get more pay, especially when people working in finance are getting more pay nowadays. What is your opinion?
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Pay disparities between public service professions and finance have widened, raising questions about social value and fairness. In my view, essential workers such as nurses and teachers should receive higher pay relative to their current levels, even if finance remains lucrative, because remuneration should reflect societal contribution and labour conditions.

The strongest reason is that nurses and teachers generate foundational public benefits that markets undervalue. They sustain health systems, educate future workers, and stabilise communities, often under heavy workloads, emotional strain, and unsocial hours. For example, chronic nurse shortages lead to longer waiting times and poorer outcomes, a cost borne by society. Higher pay would improve retention and quality, producing long-term economic returns.

Admittedly, financial salaries are driven by profit generation and risk, which can justify high rewards in competitive markets. However, these earnings are also amplified by bonuses and bargaining power rather than irreplaceable skills. When pay signals favour short-term financial gains over public services, talent is diverted away from teaching and healthcare, weakening social infrastructure. Rebalancing pay would correct incentives without eliminating market rewards.

Overall, increasing pay for nurses and teachers is justified by their indispensable contribution and demanding working conditions. While finance can remain well paid, a fairer distribution would strengthen essential services, attract capable professionals, and support sustainable social and economic outcomes.

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PTE criteria · full marks
  • Fully addresses the prompt in depth, showing full command of the argument by reformulating the issue in the writer's own words and expanding important points with specificity.
  • The argument is supported convincingly with subsidiary points and relevant examples throughout the response.
How this answer meets itThe essay gives a clear opinion that essential workers should be paid more, and it backs this up with a real example about nurse shortages. essential workers such as nurses and teachers should receive higher paychronic nurse shortages lead to longer waiting times and poorer outcomes
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Has an effective logical structure, flows smoothly, and can be followed with ease.
  • The argument is clear and cohesive and developed systematically at length; a well-developed introduction and conclusion are present, and ideas are organised cohesively into clear, logically sequenced paragraphs.
  • Uses a variety of connective devices effectively and consistently to convey relationships between ideas.
How this answer meets itThe writer uses clear linking words to guide the reader from one idea to the next. This makes the argument easy to follow. The strongest reason is thatFor exampleAdmittedlyHoweverOverall
PTE criteria · full marks
  • A variety of expressions and vocabulary are used appropriately to formulate ideas with ease and precision throughout the response.
  • No signs of limitations restricting what can be communicated.
  • Errors in language use, if present, are rare and minor, and meaning is completely clear.
How this answer meets itThe writer uses complex sentences with joining and condition clauses. The meaning stays clear and precise. even if finance remains lucrative, because remuneration should reflect societal contributionWhen pay signals favour short-term financial gains over public services, talent is diverted
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  • Shows consistent grammatical control of complex language. Errors are rare and difficult to spot.
How this answer meets itThis sentence joins two ideas correctly with a linking clause. The grammar is accurate and controlled. Higher pay would improve retention and quality, producing long-term economic returns
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  • Good command of a broad lexical repertoire, idiomatic expressions and collocations.
How this answer meets itThe writer uses precise academic words and strong word pairs about pay and society. Pay disparitiessocial valueprofit generation and risksocial infrastructure
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  • Correct spelling.
How this answer meets itBritish spellings are used correctly throughout the essay. labourstabilise
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  • Length is within the required 200 to 300 words.
How this answer meets itThe essay is 216 words, inside the 200 to 300 range. It has a clear four-paragraph structure.
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