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Practice Writing: Write Essay ID: #6141 People Activities R1
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Some people argue that young people should concentrate on study or work, some people think it is better to put energy in activities designed to broaden their experiences, such as international travel and volunteering. Support with examples or cases.

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Some people argue that young people should concentrate on study or work, some people think it is better to put energy in activities designed to broaden their experiences, such as international travel and volunteering. Support with examples or cases.
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Debate persists over whether young people should prioritise formal study or employment, or invest time in experience-building activities such as travel and volunteering. While disciplined education and early careers create credentials and income, I argue that structured experiential activities deserve significant emphasis alongside work or study, because they develop transferable skills and informed career choices.

Focusing on study or work offers clear advantages. Academic training builds foundational knowledge, and continuous employment cultivates reliability and technical competence. For example, apprenticeships in engineering combine theory with supervised practice, enabling graduates to progress efficiently and contribute productively, which is particularly important for students from limited financial backgrounds.

However, activities designed to broaden experience can be equally, if not more, valuable. International travel exposes young adults to diverse cultures, enhancing adaptability and communication, while volunteering builds civic responsibility and leadership. A graduate who volunteers abroad may return with language skills and resilience that employers value and may also make wiser educational or career decisions.

Overall, an exclusive focus on either path is limiting. Young people benefit most when rigorous study or work is complemented by purposeful experiential learning. By balancing credentials with broadened perspectives, societies cultivate capable, reflective citizens who are prepared for complex labour markets and responsible global participation.

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PTE criteria · full marks
  • Fully addresses the prompt in depth, showing full command of the argument by reformulating the issue in the writer's own words and expanding important points with specificity.
  • The argument is supported convincingly with subsidiary points and relevant examples throughout the response.
How this answer meets itThe writer takes a clear side and reframes the topic in their own words. A specific example about apprenticeships supports the answer. I argue that structured experiential activities deserve significant emphasis alongside work or studyapprenticeships in engineering combine theory with supervised practice
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Has an effective logical structure, flows smoothly, and can be followed with ease.
  • The argument is clear and cohesive and developed systematically at length; a well-developed introduction and conclusion are present, and ideas are organised cohesively into clear, logically sequenced paragraphs.
  • Uses a variety of connective devices effectively and consistently to convey relationships between ideas.
How this answer meets itThe essay uses varied linking words to open ideas, so the two paths are compared in a clear order. For exampleHoweverwhileOverallBy balancing
PTE criteria · full marks
  • A variety of expressions and vocabulary are used appropriately to formulate ideas with ease and precision throughout the response.
  • No signs of limitations restricting what can be communicated.
  • Errors in language use, if present, are rare and minor, and meaning is completely clear.
How this answer meets itThe writer uses a because clause and a which clause to build complex sentences. The meaning is clear. because they develop transferable skills and informed career choiceswhich is particularly important for students from limited financial backgrounds
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  • Shows consistent grammatical control of complex language. Errors are rare and difficult to spot.
How this answer meets itThis sentence controls a complex comparison structure correctly. activities designed to broaden experience can be equally, if not more, valuable
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  • Good command of a broad lexical repertoire, idiomatic expressions and collocations.
How this answer meets itThe essay uses precise academic words and strong collocations. foundational knowledgecivic responsibilityexperiential learninglabour markets
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  • Correct spelling.
How this answer meets itAll words are spelled correctly, including these words. prioritiseresilience
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  • Length is within the required 200 to 300 words.
How this answer meets itThe essay is 206 words, inside the 200 to 300 range. It is a clear four-paragraph essay.
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