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Practice Writing: Write Essay ID: #49029 Famous Athletes
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Some famous athletes and entertainers earn millions of dollars every year. Is it good or not?

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Some famous athletes and entertainers earn millions of dollars every year. Is it good or not?
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In contemporary society, top athletes and entertainers often receive extraordinarily high incomes that far exceed average salaries. Whether this phenomenon is beneficial to society remains contested. Overall, such earnings are largely positive because they reflect market demand and generate wider economic value, although they also raise understandable concerns about inequality.

The strongest argument in favour is that these individuals operate in global, highly competitive markets where income is closely linked to popularity and revenue creation. Successful sports stars and performers attract audiences, sponsorship, tourism, and media investment, which in turn supports many related jobs. For example, a globally recognised footballer can increase ticket sales, broadcasting income, and local business activity, meaning high pay partly circulates wealth through broader economic channels.

Critics argue that extreme rewards are socially unhealthy because they widen income gaps and distort young people's aspirations. This concern is reasonable; however, the comparison is often misleading. Athletic and entertainment careers are typically short, risky, and accessible to very few, while success usually requires years of unpaid training and exceptional ability. Moreover, many high earners contribute substantially through taxation and philanthropy, indirectly supporting public services and community projects.

In conclusion, although millionaire athletes and entertainers can symbolise inequality, their earnings are generally justified by economic contribution and market forces. With responsible taxation and greater social awareness, such high incomes can coexist with wider social benefit rather than undermine it.

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PTE criteria · full marks
  • Fully addresses the prompt in depth, showing full command of the argument by reformulating the issue in the writer's own words and expanding important points with specificity.
  • The argument is supported convincingly with subsidiary points and relevant examples throughout the response.
How this answer meets itThe essay gives a clear opinion in the introduction and backs it with a real example about a footballer. This shows the topic is answered with depth and support. such earnings are largely positive because they reflect market demand and generate wider economic valuea globally recognised footballer can increase ticket sales
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  • Has an effective logical structure, flows smoothly, and can be followed with ease.
  • The argument is clear and cohesive and developed systematically at length; a well-developed introduction and conclusion are present, and ideas are organised cohesively into clear, logically sequenced paragraphs.
  • Uses a variety of connective devices effectively and consistently to convey relationships between ideas.
How this answer meets itThe paragraphs open with clear linking words that guide the reader step by step. This makes the argument flow smoothly. Overall,For example,Moreover,In conclusion,however,
PTE criteria · full marks
  • A variety of expressions and vocabulary are used appropriately to formulate ideas with ease and precision throughout the response.
  • No signs of limitations restricting what can be communicated.
  • Errors in language use, if present, are rare and minor, and meaning is completely clear.
How this answer meets itThe writer uses long sentences with linked clauses and a concessive idea. This shows control of complex language with clear meaning. although they also raise understandable concerns about inequalityThis concern is reasonable; however, the comparison is often misleading
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  • Shows consistent grammatical control of complex language. Errors are rare and difficult to spot.
How this answer meets itThe writer builds an accurate complex sentence with a relative clause. It is correct and hard to fault. these individuals operate in global, highly competitive markets where income is closely linked to popularity
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  • Good command of a broad lexical repertoire, idiomatic expressions and collocations.
How this answer meets itThe essay uses precise topic words and strong collocations. This shows a wide word range. broadcasting incomemarket demandtaxation and philanthropycompetitive markets
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  • Correct spelling.
How this answer meets itSpelling is correct throughout, including British forms like favour and recognised. favourrecognised
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  • Length is within the required 200 to 300 words.
How this answer meets itThe essay has 230 words, which fits the limit. It is a clear four-paragraph essay with an intro, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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