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Practice Writing: Write Essay ID: #45771 Paid work
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In many countries children are engaged in different kinds of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong. Others consider it as a valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What is your opinion?

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In many countries children are engaged in different kinds of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong. Others consider it as a valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What is your opinion?
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In many societies, children participate in paid employment alongside schooling or sometimes in its place. While some observers condemn this practice outright, I argue that limited and well-regulated paid work can be beneficial, whereas extensive or exploitative labour is unacceptable and damaging to development.

The strongest reason for permitting restricted work lies in its educational value beyond textbooks. Simple jobs such as assisting in family businesses or undertaking weekend retail work can teach time management, collaboration, and basic financial literacy. Such experiences often build confidence and a sense of responsibility, helping young people understand the connection between effort and reward, which formal schooling alone may not fully provide.

However, critics are justified in warning that child labour can be harmful when poorly controlled. Long working hours, unsafe conditions, or pressure to prioritise income over education can undermine health and future prospects. In many developing contexts, paid work shifts from skill building to exploitation, making strong legislation, clear age limits, and effective enforcement essential to protect children.

In conclusion, children's participation in paid work should not be judged as completely right or wrong. When employment is light, voluntary, and compatible with education, it can foster practical skills and maturity. Nevertheless, preventing exploitation must remain the central priority, and societies should regulate child work carefully to ensure it supports, rather than damages, long-term personal and social development.

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PTE criteria · full marks
  • Fully addresses the prompt in depth, showing full command of the argument by reformulating the issue in the writer's own words and expanding important points with specificity.
  • The argument is supported convincingly with subsidiary points and relevant examples throughout the response.
How this answer meets itThe writer gives a balanced opinion and sets a clear limit. The example of family and retail work gives specific support. I argue that limited and well-regulated paid work can be beneficialassisting in family businesses or undertaking weekend retail work can teach time management
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Has an effective logical structure, flows smoothly, and can be followed with ease.
  • The argument is clear and cohesive and developed systematically at length; a well-developed introduction and conclusion are present, and ideas are organised cohesively into clear, logically sequenced paragraphs.
  • Uses a variety of connective devices effectively and consistently to convey relationships between ideas.
How this answer meets itThe essay uses clear linking words to organise the ideas. These devices guide the reader through the argument. While some observers condemn this practiceHowever,In many developing contextsIn conclusion,When employment is lightNevertheless,
PTE criteria · full marks
  • A variety of expressions and vocabulary are used appropriately to formulate ideas with ease and precision throughout the response.
  • No signs of limitations restricting what can be communicated.
  • Errors in language use, if present, are rare and minor, and meaning is completely clear.
How this answer meets itThe writer uses complex sentences with control. The 'whereas' clause and the 'which' clause add contrast and detail clearly. whereas extensive or exploitative labour is unacceptable and damaging to developmentwhich formal schooling alone may not fully provide
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Shows consistent grammatical control of complex language. Errors are rare and difficult to spot.
How this answer meets itThis sentence with 'when' joins ideas correctly and reads smoothly. It shows control of complex grammar. child labour can be harmful when poorly controlled
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  • Good command of a broad lexical repertoire, idiomatic expressions and collocations.
How this answer meets itThe essay uses strong academic collocations. These phrases show a wide vocabulary. financial literacysense of responsibilityunsafe conditionsstrong legislation
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  • Correct spelling.
How this answer meets itThe spelling is correct throughout these longer words. exploitationcollaboration
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  • Length is within the required 200 to 300 words.
How this answer meets itThe essay is 225 words, which is within the required range. It is a clear four-paragraph essay with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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