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Practice Writing: Write Essay ID: #37439 Animal rights
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Animal rights has been the subject of debate since 1970s. Are zoos helping or hurting animals? Give your opinion.

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Animal rights has been the subject of debate since 1970s. Are zoos helping or hurting animals? Give your opinion.
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Since the 1970s, the debate over animal rights has questioned whether keeping animals in zoos is ethically defensible. Although modern zoos claim to protect animal welfare, I believe zoos generally harm animals more than they help these creatures. The captivity that zoos impose often undermines animal welfare and conflicts with the core principles of animal rights.

The primary reason zoos are harmful is that they confine wild creatures in enclosures that cannot meet the needs of the animals. Many species held in zoos are adapted to vast territories, so their natural rights to roam and forage are denied. When these instincts are suppressed, the animals frequently display stress, which weakens any claim that zoos respect welfare. For example, elephants in zoos often show shortened lifespans, a clear sign that captivity violates the welfare of such creatures.

Supporters argue that zoos advance conservation through breeding programmes that could safeguard endangered animals and their rights. While these efforts have some value, most captive creatures are never returned to the wild, so the welfare benefit stays limited. Viewing animals behind zoo barriers can also reduce wildlife to entertainment rather than teaching genuine respect for animal rights. In contrast, protected habitats and wildlife sanctuaries defend the welfare of animals without stripping these creatures of their freedom. Such sanctuaries prove that conservation need not depend on the captivity that zoos rely upon.

In conclusion, despite their limited conservation claims, zoos largely hurt animals by placing human curiosity above animal welfare. Greater investment in wildlife sanctuaries and habitat protection would honour animal rights far more effectively than zoos. For the sake of these creatures, societies should value the welfare of wild animals over the fleeting spectacle that zoos provide.

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  • Fully addresses the prompt in depth, showing full command of the argument by reformulating the issue in the writer's own words and expanding important points with specificity.
  • The argument is supported convincingly with subsidiary points and relevant examples throughout the response.
How this answer meets itThe writer states a clear opinion and supports it with a real example. The view is the writer's own and it is well developed. I believe zoos generally harm animals more than they help these creatureselephants in zoos often show shortened lifespans
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  • Has an effective logical structure, flows smoothly, and can be followed with ease.
  • The argument is clear and cohesive and developed systematically at length; a well-developed introduction and conclusion are present, and ideas are organised cohesively into clear, logically sequenced paragraphs.
  • Uses a variety of connective devices effectively and consistently to convey relationships between ideas.
How this answer meets itThe essay is well ordered and uses linkers to join ideas. Each paragraph opens with a clear signal. For exampleSupporters argueIn contrastIn conclusion
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  • A variety of expressions and vocabulary are used appropriately to formulate ideas with ease and precision throughout the response.
  • No signs of limitations restricting what can be communicated.
  • Errors in language use, if present, are rare and minor, and meaning is completely clear.
How this answer meets itThe writer uses complex sentences with ease. The when-clause and the concession clause show strong control. When these instincts are suppressed, the animals frequently display stressWhile these efforts have some value
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  • Shows consistent grammatical control of complex language. Errors are rare and difficult to spot.
How this answer meets itThe complex sentence with a result clause is accurate and hard to spot as an error. It reads smoothly. so their natural rights to roam and forage are denied
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  • Good command of a broad lexical repertoire, idiomatic expressions and collocations.
How this answer meets itThe writer uses precise academic phrases and collocations. These terms are exact and natural. animal welfarebreeding programmeswildlife sanctuaries
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  • Correct spelling.
How this answer meets itSpelling is correct all through, including British forms. These words are written well. defensibleprogrammes
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  • Length is within the required 200 to 300 words.
How this answer meets itThe essay has 283 words, which is inside the 200 to 300 range. It is a clear four paragraph essay.
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