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Practice Writing: Write Essay ID: #37237 Multiculturalism
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Multiculturalism is a recent phenomenon. While many people would like to live in a multicultural society, others prefer to live in a society with their own culture and disrespect people from other nation. With which opinion do you agree? Use specific reasons to support your opinion.

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Multiculturalism is a recent phenomenon. While many people would like to live in a multicultural society, others prefer to live in a society with their own culture and disrespect people from other nation. With which opinion do you agree? Use specific reasons to support your opinion.
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Multiculturalism has grown rapidly in recent decades as migration, global trade, and digital communication have intensified. While many people welcome cultural diversity, others prefer homogeneity and sometimes show hostility towards those from other nations. I strongly support the view that a multicultural society is preferable because it encourages social progress and mutual understanding.

The strongest argument in favour of multicultural societies is their contribution to economic and intellectual development. Interaction between people from varied cultural backgrounds brings different skills, experiences, and ways of thinking. As a result, organisations and communities become more innovative and adaptable. For example, diverse workplaces are often better at developing creative solutions and responding to international markets. This broader range of perspectives improves productivity and benefits society as a whole rather than a single cultural group.

Another important reason is that multiculturalism promotes tolerance and reduces prejudice over time. Although some individuals fear the loss of cultural identity, regular contact with different traditions can challenge stereotypes and misconceptions. Shared schools, workplaces, and community spaces encourage people to co-operate despite cultural differences, leading to greater respect. By contrast, societies that reject diversity and disrespect other nations risk social division and cultural isolation in an increasingly interconnected world.

In conclusion, although preserving cultural identity matters, embracing multiculturalism offers greater long-term benefits. It strengthens economic performance, enriches social life, and fosters tolerance. Therefore, I firmly agree that multicultural societies are more beneficial than culturally exclusive ones.

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PTE criteria · full marks
  • Fully addresses the prompt in depth, showing full command of the argument by reformulating the issue in the writer's own words and expanding important points with specificity.
  • The argument is supported convincingly with subsidiary points and relevant examples throughout the response.
How this answer meets itThe essay states a clear side on multiculturalism and develops it fully. It gives the opinion "a multicultural society is preferable because it encourages social progress" and adds the example "diverse workplaces are often better at developing creative solutions". a multicultural society is preferable because it encourages social progress and mutual understandingdiverse workplaces are often better at developing creative solutions
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Has an effective logical structure, flows smoothly, and can be followed with ease.
  • The argument is clear and cohesive and developed systematically at length; a well-developed introduction and conclusion are present, and ideas are organised cohesively into clear, logically sequenced paragraphs.
  • Uses a variety of connective devices effectively and consistently to convey relationships between ideas.
How this answer meets itThe essay flows in logical paragraphs with clear connectors. Phrases like "As a result", "For example", "By contrast", and "In conclusion" guide the reader. As a result, organisationsFor example, diverse workplacesAnother important reasonBy contrast, societiesIn conclusion, although preserving
PTE criteria · full marks
  • A variety of expressions and vocabulary are used appropriately to formulate ideas with ease and precision throughout the response.
  • No signs of limitations restricting what can be communicated.
  • Errors in language use, if present, are rare and minor, and meaning is completely clear.
How this answer meets itThe writer handles concessive and comparative clauses precisely. The "Although some individuals fear..." sentence shows a smooth complex structure. Although some individuals fear the loss of cultural identity, regular contact with different traditions can challenge stereotypessocieties that reject diversity and disrespect other nations risk social division
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  • Shows consistent grammatical control of complex language. Errors are rare and difficult to spot.
How this answer meets itThe complex grammar is consistent and accurate. The relative clause "who welcome cultural diversity" style is matched by the clean structure of "their contribution to economic and intellectual development". their contribution to economic and intellectual development
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  • Good command of a broad lexical repertoire, idiomatic expressions and collocations.
How this answer meets itThe essay uses a rich academic vocabulary with ease. Phrases like "cultural diversity", "mutual understanding", and "social cohesion" fit the topic well. cultural diversitymutual understandingcultural identitycultural isolation
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  • Correct spelling.
How this answer meets itThe spelling is correct throughout. British forms like "organisations" and "co-operate" are written correctly. organisationsco-operate
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  • Length is within the required 200 to 300 words.
How this answer meets itThe essay has 237 words, which is inside the 200 to 300 range. It is a clear four-paragraph essay with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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