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Practice Writing: Write Essay ID: #36729 Education system
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Nowadays the rate of school drop-out is increasing rapidly. Many educators blame this on the characteristics of the new generation while others think the demotivating education system is the culprit. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Nowadays the rate of school drop-out is increasing rapidly. Many educators blame this on the characteristics of the new generation while others think the demotivating education system is the culprit. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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School drop-out rates have risen rapidly in many countries, prompting debate about whether students or the education system are mainly to blame. In my opinion, while generational traits play a minor part, the structure and culture of the education system are the primary culprits behind rising dropouts.

The strongest reason lies in how schools often fail to motivate diverse learners, so the demotivating system itself drives many students out. Standardised teaching prioritises examinations over practical skills, leaving many students disengaged and pushing the drop-out rate steadily upward. For example, vocationally minded youth may see little value in a memorisation-heavy curriculum unrelated to real employment. When learning feels irrelevant, attendance falls and withdrawal from school becomes a rational choice rather than mere laziness among the new generation.

Supporters of the generational argument blame young people, claiming this generation lacks perseverance and is distracted by technology. Although digital habits can shorten attention spans, this factor alone cannot explain the sustained rise in school drop-out rates. Indeed, schools that redesign the curriculum around project-based learning often achieve higher engagement and retention among the same generation of students. This evidence indicates that learner behaviour becomes a problem mainly when the education system and its teaching methods remain outdated. Consequently, educators who reform pedagogy and update the curriculum tend to reverse drop-out far more effectively than those who simply criticise youth culture. By contrast, blaming the new generation lets a rigid education system escape the scrutiny it genuinely deserves.

Ultimately, increasing drop-out rates stem chiefly from a demotivating education system rather than inherent flaws in the new generation of students. Reforming the curriculum to emphasise relevance, choice, and applied learning is therefore a wiser response than treating youth as the sole culprit.

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PTE criteria · full marks
  • Fully addresses the prompt in depth, showing full command of the argument by reformulating the issue in the writer's own words and expanding important points with specificity.
  • The argument is supported convincingly with subsidiary points and relevant examples throughout the response.
How this answer meets itThe writer gives a clear opinion and supports it with a real example. The thesis blames the system, and the example shows why students disengage. the structure and culture of the education system are the primary culprits behind rising dropoutsvocationally minded youth may see little value in a memorisation-heavy curriculum unrelated to real employment
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  • Has an effective logical structure, flows smoothly, and can be followed with ease.
  • The argument is clear and cohesive and developed systematically at length; a well-developed introduction and conclusion are present, and ideas are organised cohesively into clear, logically sequenced paragraphs.
  • Uses a variety of connective devices effectively and consistently to convey relationships between ideas.
How this answer meets itThe essay links ideas and paragraphs with varied connectors. These keep the argument logical and smooth. For exampleAlthoughIndeedConsequentlyBy contrastUltimately
PTE criteria · full marks
  • A variety of expressions and vocabulary are used appropriately to formulate ideas with ease and precision throughout the response.
  • No signs of limitations restricting what can be communicated.
  • Errors in language use, if present, are rare and minor, and meaning is completely clear.
How this answer meets itThe writer builds complex sentences with result and relative clauses with ease. Meaning is completely clear. so the demotivating system itself drives many students outschools that redesign the curriculum around project-based learning often achieve higher engagement
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  • Shows consistent grammatical control of complex language. Errors are rare and difficult to spot.
How this answer meets itThis complex sentence uses a time clause accurately. The grammar stays under full control. When learning feels irrelevant, attendance falls and withdrawal from school becomes a rational choice
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Good command of a broad lexical repertoire, idiomatic expressions and collocations.
How this answer meets itThe essay uses precise academic words and collocations. These show a broad word range. Standardised teachingproject-based learningengagement and retentionreform pedagogy
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  • Correct spelling.
How this answer meets itSpelling is correct, including British forms. These words are spelled accurately. Standardisedmemorisation
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  • Length is within the required 200 to 300 words.
How this answer meets itThe essay has 287 words, which is inside the 200 to 300 range. It is a clear four-paragraph essay.
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