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Practice Writing: Write Essay ID: #36437 Behaviour
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Some people are of the opinion that children should be rewarded for good behaviour. Others think they should be punished for bad behaviour. Discuss both views and give your personal opinion and reasons.

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Some people are of the opinion that children should be rewarded for good behaviour. Others think they should be punished for bad behaviour. Discuss both views and give your personal opinion and reasons.
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Opinions differ on whether children should be rewarded for good behaviour or punished for bad behaviour. Advocates of positive reward stress motivation and emotional growth, whereas others prioritise strict discipline and firm boundaries. In my personal opinion, rewarding good behaviour ought to be the primary approach, while punishment for bad behaviour should stay limited and used carefully as guidance rather than control.

Those who support rewards argue that praising good behaviour encourages children to repeat desirable actions and gradually builds their internal responsibility. For instance, recognising a child who finishes homework can strengthen self-esteem, dedication, and perseverance, helping children regulate their conduct as they mature. Such caring reinforcement links good behaviour with achievement rather than fear, and it enhances the quality of family relationships over time.

In contrast, those who favour punishment maintain that firm discipline teaches consequences and deters bad behaviour among children clearly. Admittedly, children who are punished proportionately can learn consequences when safety, respect, or persistent rule-breaking is at stake. However, harsh punishment risks producing anxiety and resentment, so children learn obedience without genuine understanding of why the behaviour was bad. Consequently, punishment alone rarely develops the moral reasoning that lasting good behaviour truly requires. Nurturing children through consistent reward and fair discipline together shapes personality far more effectively than either extreme on its own.

Ultimately, both reward and firm discipline have a role in guiding children, yet they should not carry equal weight when good behaviour is the goal. Reward-based strategies cultivate confidence, discipline, and good values, whereas punishment for bad behaviour should function only as a secondary, educational response. Therefore, prioritising encouragement of good behaviour alongside firm but caring discipline is the wisest way to raise responsible and well-adjusted children.

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PTE criteria · full marks
  • Fully addresses the prompt in depth, showing full command of the argument by reformulating the issue in the writer's own words and expanding important points with specificity.
  • The argument is supported convincingly with subsidiary points and relevant examples throughout the response.
How this answer meets itThe essay discusses both reward and punishment and gives a clear personal opinion. It supports its view with an example about homework praise. rewarding good behaviour ought to be the primary approachrecognising a child who finishes homework can strengthen self-esteem, dedication, and perseverance
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Has an effective logical structure, flows smoothly, and can be followed with ease.
  • The argument is clear and cohesive and developed systematically at length; a well-developed introduction and conclusion are present, and ideas are organised cohesively into clear, logically sequenced paragraphs.
  • Uses a variety of connective devices effectively and consistently to convey relationships between ideas.
How this answer meets itThe essay uses clear linking words to show both views and the ending. They keep the ideas well ordered. For instanceIn contrastAdmittedlyHoweverUltimately
PTE criteria · full marks
  • A variety of expressions and vocabulary are used appropriately to formulate ideas with ease and precision throughout the response.
  • No signs of limitations restricting what can be communicated.
  • Errors in language use, if present, are rare and minor, and meaning is completely clear.
How this answer meets itThe writer uses concession and result clauses with ease. The examples below show complex control. harsh punishment risks producing anxiety and resentment, so children learn obedience without genuine understandingwhile punishment for bad behaviour should stay limited and used carefully
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  • Shows consistent grammatical control of complex language. Errors are rare and difficult to spot.
How this answer meets itThe sentence below shows correct complex grammar with a clear contrast. It is accurate. punishment alone rarely develops the moral reasoning that lasting good behaviour truly requires
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  • Good command of a broad lexical repertoire, idiomatic expressions and collocations.
How this answer meets itThe essay uses precise words and pairings on this topic. They sound academic and exact. emotional growthinternal responsibilitymoral reasoningfirm discipline
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  • Correct spelling.
How this answer meets itThe spelling stays correct across the essay. Both words below are spelled well. perseverancereinforcement
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  • Length is within the required 200 to 300 words.
How this answer meets itThe essay is 285 words, which is in the 200 to 300 range. It is a clear four-paragraph essay.
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