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Practice Writing: Write Essay ID: #35536 Hometown change 2
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If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

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If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
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If I could alter one important thing about my hometown, I would improve the public transport across the whole town. Although the city has grown, the transport infrastructure of this town has not kept pace, which creates daily strain throughout the area. Improving this specific service would be the most valuable change because it touches every neighbourhood, from the community centre to the quiet outer region.

The strongest reason for this change is efficiency across the city and its road network. Unreliable buses force residents of my hometown to depend on private cars, so congestion clogs the roads of the area each morning. A punctual public network would cut delays and make daily routines more predictable for the whole town. For example, this one improvement to the city would save the time that workers in every locality currently waste on the road.

A further reason for this change concerns fairness and opportunity across the region. Weak transport disadvantages elderly and low-income residents of the town most, because many cannot reach jobs, education or healthcare in distant parts of the city. Expanding affordable public services would widen access within each neighbourhood and lower the emissions that harm the environment of the whole area. Indeed, cities where integrated networks improved air quality show how such an improvement strengthens community life across a region. This single change would therefore deliver a specific benefit that a purely symbolic project in my hometown could never match.

In conclusion, upgrading public transport would be the most important change and the clearest improvement for my hometown. This change to the town would raise efficiency, widen opportunity and support a cleaner environment across the whole area. By easing congestion and improving access, this improvement would create a more liveable city and a stronger region.

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PTE criteria · full marks
  • Fully addresses the prompt in depth, showing full command of the argument by reformulating the issue in the writer's own words and expanding important points with specificity.
  • The argument is supported convincingly with subsidiary points and relevant examples throughout the response.
How this answer meets itThe writer names one clear change and explains why, then supports it with a concrete example about saving workers time. This answers the prompt in depth. I would improve the public transport across the whole townthis one improvement to the city would save the time that workers in every locality currently waste
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Has an effective logical structure, flows smoothly, and can be followed with ease.
  • The argument is clear and cohesive and developed systematically at length; a well-developed introduction and conclusion are present, and ideas are organised cohesively into clear, logically sequenced paragraphs.
  • Uses a variety of connective devices effectively and consistently to convey relationships between ideas.
How this answer meets itThe writer opens paragraphs with clear reason and example linkers. These give the essay a smooth and logical shape. The strongest reason for this changeFor exampleA further reason for this changeIndeedIn conclusion
PTE criteria · full marks
  • A variety of expressions and vocabulary are used appropriately to formulate ideas with ease and precision throughout the response.
  • No signs of limitations restricting what can be communicated.
  • Errors in language use, if present, are rare and minor, and meaning is completely clear.
How this answer meets itThe essay uses complex sentences with concessive and reason clauses that read naturally. The meaning is always clear. Although the city has grown, the transport infrastructure of this town has not kept pacebecause many cannot reach jobs, education or healthcare in distant parts of the city
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Shows consistent grammatical control of complex language. Errors are rare and difficult to spot.
How this answer meets itThis conditional sentence handles a difficult structure with no mistakes. The grammar control is steady. If I could alter one important thing about my hometown, I would improve the public transport
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Good command of a broad lexical repertoire, idiomatic expressions and collocations.
How this answer meets itThe essay uses precise academic words and strong collocations. These show a broad lexical range. transport infrastructurecongestion clogswiden accessmore liveable city
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  • Correct spelling.
How this answer meets itSpelling is correct throughout the essay, including the British form of this word. There are no spelling errors. neighbourhoodpublic transport
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  • Length is within the required 200 to 300 words.
How this answer meets itThe essay is 296 words, which sits inside the 200 to 300 range. It is a clear four-paragraph essay.
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