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Practice Writing: Write Essay ID: #34199 famous
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People believe that many famous personalities (such as film stars, musicians, sports person) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? What other type of profession should be paid more?

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People believe that many famous personalities (such as film stars, musicians, sports person) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? What other type of profession should be paid more?
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Many people argue that celebrities receive disproportionate incomes compared with their social contribution. I agree that leading film stars, musicians, and sports professionals are often overpaid, and I contend that remuneration should prioritise occupations that deliver essential, long-term public value rather than market hype.

The primary reason is that celebrity pay is driven by commercial visibility, not societal necessity. Entertainment markets reward scarce attention and brand endorsement, allowing top performers to capture enormous revenues. For example, a star athlete may earn more in a season than thousands of nurses combined, despite contributing little to public welfare. Such pay gaps intensify inequality and distort young people's career aspirations.

Instead, higher pay should be directed to professions that sustain social infrastructure, particularly healthcare workers and teachers. These roles require extensive training, carry high responsibility, and generate benefits that accumulate across generations. During health crises, clinicians preserve lives under pressure, while educators build human capital daily in under-resourced classrooms. Competitive salaries would improve retention, attract talent, and ultimately strengthen productivity and social cohesion.

In conclusion, while celebrity earnings reflect market demand, they are excessive relative to their social impact. Redirecting reward structures towards essential professions such as healthcare and education would better align pay with public benefit, reduce inequality, and support sustainable societal progress.

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PTE criteria · full marks
  • Fully addresses the prompt in depth, showing full command of the argument by reformulating the issue in the writer's own words and expanding important points with specificity.
  • The argument is supported convincingly with subsidiary points and relevant examples throughout the response.
How this answer meets itThe essay gives a clear opinion that celebrities are overpaid, and it supports this with a comparison of an athlete and nurses. leading film stars, musicians, and sports professionals are often overpaida star athlete may earn more in a season than thousands of nurses combined
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Has an effective logical structure, flows smoothly, and can be followed with ease.
  • The argument is clear and cohesive and developed systematically at length; a well-developed introduction and conclusion are present, and ideas are organised cohesively into clear, logically sequenced paragraphs.
  • Uses a variety of connective devices effectively and consistently to convey relationships between ideas.
How this answer meets itThe ideas move in a clear order and use good linking words to open each paragraph and point. The primary reasonFor exampleInsteadIn conclusionwhile
PTE criteria · full marks
  • A variety of expressions and vocabulary are used appropriately to formulate ideas with ease and precision throughout the response.
  • No signs of limitations restricting what can be communicated.
  • Errors in language use, if present, are rare and minor, and meaning is completely clear.
How this answer meets itThe writer uses complex sentences with ease, including a contrast clause that keeps the meaning clear. while celebrity earnings reflect market demand, they are excessive relative to their social impactThese roles require extensive training, carry high responsibility, and generate benefits that accumulate across generations
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Shows consistent grammatical control of complex language. Errors are rare and difficult to spot.
How this answer meets itThe complex sentence with a subordinate clause is built correctly and is hard to fault. During health crises, clinicians preserve lives under pressure, while educators build human capital daily
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Good command of a broad lexical repertoire, idiomatic expressions and collocations.
How this answer meets itThe essay uses precise academic words and strong word pairs with good command. disproportionate incomescommercial visibilitysocial infrastructurehuman capital
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  • Correct spelling.
How this answer meets itThe spelling is correct all through, including harder words like disproportionate. disproportionateremuneration
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  • Length is within the required 200 to 300 words.
How this answer meets itThe essay has 211 words, which fits the range. It is a clear four-paragraph essay.
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