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Practice Writing: Write Essay ID: #34052 graduation
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Some people believe that finding a job is essential after graduation, while others believe that continuing education proves to be more essential. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Some people believe that finding a job is essential after graduation, while others believe that continuing education proves to be more essential. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
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After completing university, graduates often face a dilemma between entering the labour market immediately and pursuing further study. Both options offer distinct benefits, but their value depends on long-term career development. This essay argues that while employment provides practical experience, continuing education is generally more essential for sustained professional growth.

Supporters of immediate employment emphasise financial independence and workplace exposure. Paid work allows graduates to apply theoretical knowledge, develop professional skills, and understand organisational expectations. For example, an engineering graduate who joins a firm quickly gains practical problem-solving abilities that universities cannot fully replicate. Early employment can therefore enhance confidence and employability in competitive industries.

However, others contend that continuing education is more crucial in an increasingly specialised economy. Advanced degrees and professional qualifications deepen expertise and open access to higher-level roles. In fields such as data science or healthcare, postgraduate training is often a prerequisite for advancement rather than a luxury. Moreover, extended study encourages critical thinking and adaptability, which support long-term career resilience.

In my view, although work experience is valuable, continuing education has greater overall importance. Further study strengthens foundational knowledge, improves career mobility, and protects graduates from rapid technological change. When combined later with employment, it leads to more meaningful and sustainable career outcomes. Therefore, prioritising education after graduation is a wiser investment for most graduates.

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PTE criteria · full marks
  • Fully addresses the prompt in depth, showing full command of the argument by reformulating the issue in the writer's own words and expanding important points with specificity.
  • The argument is supported convincingly with subsidiary points and relevant examples throughout the response.
How this answer meets itThe essay states a clear opinion that further study matters more, and it supports this with a specific engineering example. continuing education is generally more essential for sustained professional growthan engineering graduate who joins a firm quickly gains practical problem-solving abilities
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Has an effective logical structure, flows smoothly, and can be followed with ease.
  • The argument is clear and cohesive and developed systematically at length; a well-developed introduction and conclusion are present, and ideas are organised cohesively into clear, logically sequenced paragraphs.
  • Uses a variety of connective devices effectively and consistently to convey relationships between ideas.
How this answer meets itThe paragraphs follow a logical order and use clear linkers to signal each new idea and contrast. For exampleHoweverMoreoverIn my viewTherefore
PTE criteria · full marks
  • A variety of expressions and vocabulary are used appropriately to formulate ideas with ease and precision throughout the response.
  • No signs of limitations restricting what can be communicated.
  • Errors in language use, if present, are rare and minor, and meaning is completely clear.
How this answer meets itThe writer handles complex sentences with ease, including a contrast clause that stays clear and precise. although work experience is valuable, continuing education has greater overall importancewhich support long-term career resilience
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Shows consistent grammatical control of complex language. Errors are rare and difficult to spot.
How this answer meets itThe complex sentence with a subordinate clause is built correctly and is hard to fault. When combined later with employment, it leads to more meaningful and sustainable career outcomes
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  • Good command of a broad lexical repertoire, idiomatic expressions and collocations.
How this answer meets itThe essay uses precise academic words and strong collocations with good command. financial independenceorganisational expectationscareer mobilitycritical thinking
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  • Correct spelling.
How this answer meets itThe spelling is correct all through, including the British form of emphasise. emphasiselabour
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  • Length is within the required 200 to 300 words.
How this answer meets itThe essay has 220 words, which fits the range. It is a clear four-paragraph essay.
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