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Practice Writing: Write Essay ID: #33493 Successful sports
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Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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Successful sports professionals frequently earn far more than individuals in other socially important occupations, prompting debate about whether this disparity is fair. Some argue such income is justified by market demand, while others consider it inequitable. This essay discusses both perspectives and contends that high sports salaries are understandable but require moderation.

Supporters of large earnings in professional sport emphasise economic reality and scarcity. Elite athletes perform in a global entertainment industry that produces enormous revenue through broadcasting, sponsorship, and ticket sales. Very few people possess the physical ability, mental resilience, and discipline to compete at the highest level, and sporting careers are short, uncertain, and vulnerable to sudden injury.

By contrast, critics maintain that pay should better correspond to social contribution rather than popularity. Occupations such as nursing, teaching, and emergency services are fundamental to public wellbeing, yet their financial rewards remain modest despite extensive training and constant responsibility. I share the view that extreme income gaps are unfair because they risk devaluing work that sustains health, safety, and education.

In conclusion, the substantial earnings of sports professionals are driven by genuine market demand and rare talent, which makes them partly justified. Nevertheless, greater balance is required so that essential professions receive remuneration and social esteem that more accurately represent their importance to society.

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PTE criteria · full marks
  • Fully addresses the prompt in depth, showing full command of the argument by reformulating the issue in the writer's own words and expanding important points with specificity.
  • The argument is supported convincingly with subsidiary points and relevant examples throughout the response.
How this answer meets itThe writer gives a clear opinion and supports it with real detail. The view is that high pay needs balance, shown with essential jobs. high sports salaries are understandable but require moderationOccupations such as nursing, teaching, and emergency services
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Has an effective logical structure, flows smoothly, and can be followed with ease.
  • The argument is clear and cohesive and developed systematically at length; a well-developed introduction and conclusion are present, and ideas are organised cohesively into clear, logically sequenced paragraphs.
  • Uses a variety of connective devices effectively and consistently to convey relationships between ideas.
How this answer meets itClear linking words open the sentences and order both views well. They guide the reader smoothly. whileBy contrastyetIn conclusionNevertheless
PTE criteria · full marks
  • A variety of expressions and vocabulary are used appropriately to formulate ideas with ease and precision throughout the response.
  • No signs of limitations restricting what can be communicated.
  • Errors in language use, if present, are rare and minor, and meaning is completely clear.
How this answer meets itThe writer uses long sentences with joined clauses that stay clear. These show good control of complex language. which makes them partly justifiedso that essential professions receive remuneration and social esteem
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Shows consistent grammatical control of complex language. Errors are rare and difficult to spot.
How this answer meets itThis long sentence with linked clauses is built correctly and reads well. The grammar stays under full control. sporting careers are short, uncertain, and vulnerable to sudden injury
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Good command of a broad lexical repertoire, idiomatic expressions and collocations.
How this answer meets itThe essay uses precise academic words and natural word pairs. These fit the economics topic well. market demandglobal entertainment industrymental resiliencepublic wellbeing
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  • Correct spelling.
How this answer meets itThe spelling is correct throughout the essay. These two words are good examples. inequitableremuneration
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  • Length is within the required 200 to 300 words.
How this answer meets itThe essay has 215 words, which is inside the 200 to 300 range. It is a clear four paragraph essay.
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