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Practice Writing: Write Essay ID: #33281 advertisements
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Some people think placing advertisements in schools is a great resource for public schools that need additionally funding, but others think it exploits children by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors. Choose which position you most agree with and discuss why you choose that position. Support your point of view with details from your own experiences, observations or reading.

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Some people think placing advertisements in schools is a great resource for public schools that need additionally funding, but others think it exploits children by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors. Choose which position you most agree with and discuss why you choose that position. Support your point of view with details from your own experiences, observations or reading.
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Placing commercial advertising in schools is often promoted as a response to persistent funding shortages; however, I strongly agree that it exploits children as a captive audience. Schools exist to foster learning and personal development, not to expose students to marketing influences in an environment where attendance is compulsory and critical judgement is still developing.

The primary concern is that school-based advertising undermines educational integrity by blurring the boundary between learning and persuasion. Children are particularly vulnerable to promotional messages and may struggle to recognise bias. For instance, branded posters or sponsored digital platforms can normalise consumption and subtly shape preferences, prioritising brand visibility over educational neutrality. Parents also have limited capacity to regulate such exposure during the school day.

Supporters argue that advertising revenue funds technology, sports equipment, or arts programmes. Although financial pressure on public schools is undeniable, this approach treats students as a means of income rather than learners needing protection. From public debate, it is evident that reliance on sponsorship and related practises can generate conflicts of interest and subtle pressure on school decisions.

In conclusion, while additional funding is essential, allowing advertising in schools compromises ethical responsibility and exploits children's vulnerability. More sustainable public investment and community-based funding preserve schools as commercial-free spaces dedicated to education and student wellbeing.

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PTE criteria · full marks
  • Fully addresses the prompt in depth, showing full command of the argument by reformulating the issue in the writer's own words and expanding important points with specificity.
  • The argument is supported convincingly with subsidiary points and relevant examples throughout the response.
How this answer meets itThe essay states a clear position that school advertising exploits children. The example about branded posters gives strong support. it exploits children as a captive audiencebranded posters or sponsored digital platforms can normalise consumption
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Has an effective logical structure, flows smoothly, and can be followed with ease.
  • The argument is clear and cohesive and developed systematically at length; a well-developed introduction and conclusion are present, and ideas are organised cohesively into clear, logically sequenced paragraphs.
  • Uses a variety of connective devices effectively and consistently to convey relationships between ideas.
How this answer meets itThe writer connects ideas and both sides with clear linking words. The devices below guide the reader in order. The primary concern isFor instance, branded postersSupporters argue that advertising revenueIn conclusion, while additional funding is essential
PTE criteria · full marks
  • A variety of expressions and vocabulary are used appropriately to formulate ideas with ease and precision throughout the response.
  • No signs of limitations restricting what can be communicated.
  • Errors in language use, if present, are rare and minor, and meaning is completely clear.
How this answer meets itThe essay uses complex sentences with relative and concession clauses that read with ease. The examples below show this. where attendance is compulsory and critical judgement is still developingAlthough financial pressure on public schools is undeniable
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Shows consistent grammatical control of complex language. Errors are rare and difficult to spot.
How this answer meets itThe writer controls complex grammar cleanly. The clause below is joined correctly. may struggle to recognise bias
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Good command of a broad lexical repertoire, idiomatic expressions and collocations.
How this answer meets itThe writer uses precise words and natural collocations. The phrases below show a wide word range. captive audienceeducational integrityconflicts of intereststudent wellbeing
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  • Correct spelling.
How this answer meets itAll words are spelled correctly and the writer uses the British form below. This shows accurate spelling. practisesvulnerability
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  • Length is within the required 200 to 300 words.
How this answer meets itThe essay has 214 words, which is inside the 200 to 300 limit. It is a clear four-paragraph essay with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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