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Some famous people such as pop-stars and sportsman give up the right to privacy, because this is the price of fame. To what extent do you agree/disagree with this point of view? Give your opinion with your experiences.

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Some famous people such as pop-stars and sportsman give up the right to privacy, because this is the price of fame. To what extent do you agree/disagree with this point of view? Give your opinion with your experiences.
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It is often argued that celebrities, including pop stars and athletes, must surrender their privacy as an inevitable cost of fame. I largely agree with this view, although I believe the loss of privacy should be limited to what is reasonably connected to their public roles, rather than extending to every aspect of their lives.

Fame is built on public attention, and well-known figures actively benefit from media exposure to maintain their careers. Fans, sponsors, and organisations expect visibility, which naturally reduces personal privacy. From common observation, sportspeople frequently share training routines, interviews, and public appearances to strengthen their public image, and this exposure directly supports commercial success. In this sense, a certain level of scrutiny is an implicit exchange for wealth, influence, and professional opportunities.

However, agreeing entirely with unrestricted intrusion is problematic. Although celebrities accept attention related to their work, constant surveillance of family life or private behaviour serves little public interest. Experience from widely reported media controversies shows that excessive intrusion can damage mental health and discourage talented individuals from remaining in the public sphere. Therefore, while fame justifies reduced privacy, ethical boundaries remain necessary.

In conclusion, famous individuals do give up part of their right to privacy as a consequence of public recognition. Nevertheless, this sacrifice should be proportionate, protecting personal dignity while allowing the visibility that fame reasonably demands.

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PTE criteria · full marks
  • Fully addresses the prompt in depth, showing full command of the argument by reformulating the issue in the writer's own words and expanding important points with specificity.
  • The argument is supported convincingly with subsidiary points and relevant examples throughout the response.
How this answer meets itThe writer largely agrees but sets a clear limit, and supports it with an example about sportspeople. This answers the prompt with depth and nuance. the loss of privacy should be limited to what is reasonably connected to their public rolessportspeople frequently share training routines, interviews, and public appearances
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Has an effective logical structure, flows smoothly, and can be followed with ease.
  • The argument is clear and cohesive and developed systematically at length; a well-developed introduction and conclusion are present, and ideas are organised cohesively into clear, logically sequenced paragraphs.
  • Uses a variety of connective devices effectively and consistently to convey relationships between ideas.
How this answer meets itThe paragraphs open with clear signals and the ideas follow a logical order. These connectors link the argument smoothly. From common observationIn this senseHoweverThereforeIn conclusion
PTE criteria · full marks
  • A variety of expressions and vocabulary are used appropriately to formulate ideas with ease and precision throughout the response.
  • No signs of limitations restricting what can be communicated.
  • Errors in language use, if present, are rare and minor, and meaning is completely clear.
How this answer meets itThe essay uses concessive and relative clauses with ease. This range keeps the meaning fully clear. although I believe the loss of privacy should be limitedwhich naturally reduces personal privacy
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Shows consistent grammatical control of complex language. Errors are rare and difficult to spot.
How this answer meets itThe writer controls a complex sentence with a while-clause and correct forms. This shows strong grammar control. while fame justifies reduced privacy, ethical boundaries remain necessary
PTE criteria · full marks
  • Good command of a broad lexical repertoire, idiomatic expressions and collocations.
How this answer meets itThe essay uses precise academic words and good collocations. These show a broad lexical range. media exposureconstant surveillancepublic spherepersonal dignity
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  • Correct spelling.
How this answer meets itAll words are spelled correctly, including the British form organisations. This meets the correct spelling standard. organisationsproportionate
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  • Length is within the required 200 to 300 words.
How this answer meets itThe essay is 224 words, which is within the 200 to 300 range. It is a clear four-paragraph essay with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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